revising an essay

i wrote a monulogue essay about walter white the breaking bad charachter and  there are some notes that my professsor want me to work on it.  and provide the essay and the prompt in the attachment below.  i need the essay very simple not complicated. cause am international student and my english is not hat good.

 
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